[學(xué)生習(xí)作A]

　　My hobby is read books①。When I was seven years old.I became interested in reading books.I like needing books because there are a lot of useful things in books.I can learn a lot of knowledge from books. Books also② can teach me how to be a good person.Books even can solve many problems for me.I will read more good books to improve myself.

　�、俑臑閞eading books，動詞作表語時應(yīng)該用動名詞。

　�、赼lso的位置應(yīng)放在can之后。

　　[點(diǎn)評]：檔次9-11分。

　　①要點(diǎn)不全，漏掉最后一個要點(diǎn)。

　�、诰渥踊�本無誤，能正確傳遞信息給讀者但文章不流暢，句子與句子之間過渡不自然，給讀者感覺在回答上述問題。

　�、塾猩倭垮e誤。

　　[學(xué)生習(xí)作B]

　　My hobby is reading.Reading books is very enjoyable.When I was young ，my mother used to tell me a story before.I went to bed every night.The stories were so interesting that I always felt they weren’t enough.So I began to read books by myself.Little by little I became interested in reading.I can learn much knowledge and many interesting things all over the world.When I read books，I can enjoy the beautiful sentences.At the same time I can improve my writing.I want to be a writer in the future，so I must study hard and read more books so that my dream can come true.

　�、匍_門見山、點(diǎn)題。

　�、谡媲榱髀叮�理由充分。

　　③文中帶圈的連詞使用得恰當(dāng)，使文章過渡自然、

　�、芮擅钍褂镁湫鸵员頉Q心。

　　[點(diǎn)評]：檔次13-14分。

　�、偾宄�表達(dá)寫作目的，要點(diǎn)齊全。

　�、谡Z言表達(dá)靈活多樣，字里行間流露出真情實(shí)感，文章有感染力。

　�、矍‘�(dāng)使用連詞和從句，語言流暢，且無錯誤，是一篇高質(zhì)量的作文。