my  mother   name  is  zhangyan  ,she's  thirty. my  mothre  love  vegetables  and  peanuts.she's  very  pretty.she's  tall  and  thin.she's  do  housework.she's  straight  hair  .  she  can  make  delicious  food.     this  is  mothre!

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  My mother's name is Zhang Yan. She's thirty. She's tall and thin, and she's got straight hair. She's very pretty. She loves vegetables and peanuts. She can cook delicious food. She's doing housework now!

  This is my mother!

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    四年級:李名揚(yáng)

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