Spring to soundless and stirless are coming.That blossoming flowers, is her figure.The breeze blows, is her footsteps. The light fragrance of flowers, is her use of perfume.Spring, I saw her figure, I heard her footsteps, I smell her breath.She is coming, who is she? She is spring, spring is coming!
修改后:
Spring is coming quietly. The blossoming flowers are her figures. The blowing breeze is her footstep. The fragrance of flowers is her perfume. I can see her figures, hear her footstep and smell her breath. The spring is coming.
修改老師: Crystal老師五年級(jí):孫甜甜
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